Writing the text tonight wired me up. I have to versions, one in French and one in English. Both written togther in a total of 5 hours. This may be why it is still crappy. No one down under has comented. I dont know if it is just too crazy because ideas are not fully developed but only hinted at. Things, certain details, could be greatly expanded on. 

I really feel like it is a terrible text, both in French and in English. Hubby's harsh critic really destroyed it. Or how I looked at the text. Now all i can think of is that it is crazy boring: crazy and boring. what a crappy story! Badly retold!